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Today I will be writing about a piece of work that I am proud of.
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For this blog post that I am reading over\writing now, we are supposed to share a piece of "something" that we are proud of and why. Today I will be sharing my writing for the Elsie Writing comp. Here is the piece of writing that I am proud of.
Is this the end?
“Belle, Where’s the remote to turn the radio on?” my father asked.
I pointed to the rusty remote lying on the concrete floor ready to explode.
I pointed to the rusty remote lying on the concrete floor ready to explode.
“Over there dad” I said. He gave me a smile and then turned on the radio.
“Hey dad. Can we go for a walk around the block?”
“Soon Belle. I’m just listening to the news. I will call you when.”
I nodded and climbed up the creaky stairs to my room.
I nodded and climbed up the creaky stairs to my room.
Half an now later my dad still hasn’t come up to say were going.
I decided to go down and see what’s the hold up.
I opened my new blue door and thumped down the stairs.
When I arrived into the lounge my dad was gone! Where was he?
I decided to call out “Dad! Where are you?” No reply. I started to panic.
What do I do? I ran around the house looking in every corner hoping to find my dad.
Still nothing! That was it. I was going for a walk by myself no matter what.
I slipped my sneakers on and opened the door.
Then started racing down the driveway and out onto the footpath.
I stopped half way down the path to catch my breath.
I could feel my heart racing like a cheater and my head dizzy like a car.
Then started walking again.
I decided to go down and see what’s the hold up.
I opened my new blue door and thumped down the stairs.
When I arrived into the lounge my dad was gone! Where was he?
I decided to call out “Dad! Where are you?” No reply. I started to panic.
What do I do? I ran around the house looking in every corner hoping to find my dad.
Still nothing! That was it. I was going for a walk by myself no matter what.
I slipped my sneakers on and opened the door.
Then started racing down the driveway and out onto the footpath.
I stopped half way down the path to catch my breath.
I could feel my heart racing like a cheater and my head dizzy like a car.
Then started walking again.
An hour or so later I stopped at shop to get a drink and something to eat.
Nelson was known for some awesome food and drink. Well that’s what I think!
I waited in line for about 10 minutes until I finally ordered. Then went to a table.
Nelson was known for some awesome food and drink. Well that’s what I think!
I waited in line for about 10 minutes until I finally ordered. Then went to a table.
Later on when I was walking back home, someone came out of there house yelling” Earthquake!
Earthquake! There is going to be a earthquake! Do something…” I stopped in sudden.
Earthquake? If there was one where was my dad?
I started to panic again and ran up to the lady asking
“What time and where abouts is there going to be an earthquake?”
The lady stared at me for a few minutes before replying back and saying”
There is going to be a 5.2 magnitude earthquake that is about to hit Nelson
in about a few minutes.”
I stopped and stared. Will I live? Where is dad?
I said thanks to the lady for the notice and ran as fast as I could to my house.
When I arrived at my home, I opened the door and looked for dad again.
He still wasn’t there. Where was he?
Then suddenly the ground started to shake like the earth was falling into pieces
and the house started to topple down on me. Is this the end?
Earthquake! There is going to be a earthquake! Do something…” I stopped in sudden.
Earthquake? If there was one where was my dad?
I started to panic again and ran up to the lady asking
“What time and where abouts is there going to be an earthquake?”
The lady stared at me for a few minutes before replying back and saying”
There is going to be a 5.2 magnitude earthquake that is about to hit Nelson
in about a few minutes.”
I stopped and stared. Will I live? Where is dad?
I said thanks to the lady for the notice and ran as fast as I could to my house.
When I arrived at my home, I opened the door and looked for dad again.
He still wasn’t there. Where was he?
Then suddenly the ground started to shake like the earth was falling into pieces
and the house started to topple down on me. Is this the end?
This is why I am proud of this Writing piece:
I am proud of this piece of writing because I used a lot of describing words
and spent a lot of time on it. I also used great punctation and got great feedback from my friends.
and spent a lot of time on it. I also used great punctation and got great feedback from my friends.
Do you have a piece of Writing that you are proud of? Why?
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